Rawlen Nara's Rank-up

Subject: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up Wed Oct 10, 2012 3:54 pm

Character Name: Rawlen Nara

Username: Rawlen Nara

Link to Character Bio: Rawlen Nara (Quincy)

Current Rank: 0

Current Exp: [10/20]

Roleplays to be Evaluated: Recruitment

Requested Stat Point Increases: +5 Technique

Subject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up Thu Oct 11, 2012 12:44 am

Recruitment: [2/10]

REALLY SHORT. I mean really, really, really, really short. Even for a meet and greet it's so skimpy. Actually you really didn't introduce yourself at all. Sure you put forth your idea for people to join your group, but that's it. I think you could have let the thread go longer or fuse the mentioned 2nd thread into it. Alot more could have been done.

Number of Posts : 19 Age : 30 Registration Date : 2012-09-27

Thread to be evaluated: Maintenance

Subject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up Wed Oct 31, 2012 4:14 pm

Maintenance: [3/10]

This was rather normal thread until some things stood out. So after referring to the character profile realized you walk around with a bow over your shoulder. A real life bow. I thought you had a spiritual power one, but guess not. So how does a guy walking around with a bow on his shoulder look inconspicuous? Maybe you should design a foldable bow or something. Then this:

Quote :: There had been a bird's nest on the roof and Ezrachek picked up one of the eggs, sliding the electrical tape back under the egg, where the birds wouldn't really notice.

Yup character slip.

Subject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up Thu Nov 15, 2012 4:29 am

Thread to be evaluated: Assassination

Subject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up Thu Jan 03, 2013 7:52 pm

Assassination? - 5/10

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