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 Rawlen Nara's Rank-up

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Rawlen Nara

Rawlen Nara


Male
Number of Posts : 19
Age : 30
Registration Date : 2012-09-27

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PostSubject: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeWed Oct 10, 2012 3:54 pm

Character Name: Rawlen Nara

Username: Rawlen Nara

Link to Character Bio: Rawlen Nara (Quincy)

Current Rank: 0

Current Exp: [10/20]

Roleplays to be Evaluated: Recruitment

Requested Stat Point Increases: +5 Technique
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Arawn

Arawn


Male
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23

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PostSubject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeThu Oct 11, 2012 12:44 am

Recruitment: [2/10]

REALLY SHORT. I mean really, really, really, really short. Even for a meet and greet it's so skimpy. Actually you really didn't introduce yourself at all. Sure you put forth your idea for people to join your group, but that's it. I think you could have let the thread go longer or fuse the mentioned 2nd thread into it. Alot more could have been done.
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Rawlen Nara

Rawlen Nara


Male
Number of Posts : 19
Age : 30
Registration Date : 2012-09-27

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PostSubject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 22, 2012 12:27 am

Thread to be evaluated: Maintenance
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Arawn

Arawn


Male
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23

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PostSubject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeWed Oct 31, 2012 4:14 pm

Maintenance: [3/10]

This was rather normal thread until some things stood out. So after referring to the character profile realized you walk around with a bow over your shoulder. A real life bow. I thought you had a spiritual power one, but guess not. So how does a guy walking around with a bow on his shoulder look inconspicuous? Maybe you should design a foldable bow or something. Then this:

Quote :
There had been a bird's nest on the roof and Ezrachek picked up one of the eggs, sliding the electrical tape back under the egg, where the birds wouldn't really notice.

Shocked Yup character slip.
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Rawlen Nara

Rawlen Nara


Male
Number of Posts : 19
Age : 30
Registration Date : 2012-09-27

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PostSubject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeThu Nov 15, 2012 4:29 am

Thread to be evaluated: Assassination
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DarkMaster

DarkMaster


Male
Number of Posts : 863
Age : 39
Location : In a daze.
Job/Interests : That's Officer DarkMaster to you, buddy.
Quote : I'm afraid of the dark.
Registration Date : 2010-07-18

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PostSubject: Re: Rawlen Nara's Rank-up   Rawlen Nara's Rank-up I_icon_minitimeThu Jan 03, 2013 7:52 pm

Assassination? - 5/10
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