Hinsshi's Rank Up Request:

Subject: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sat Sep 03, 2011 5:20 pm

Character Name: Hinsshi Niaga

Username: greatblade

Link to Character Bio: Hinsshi Niaga

Current Rank: [1/11]

Current Exp: [15/30]

Roleplays to be Evaluated:
- Hinsshi's First Steps to Progress
- Hinsshi's first Field Trip, This is Ganna Hurt

Requested Stat Point Increases:
- Rank One: +5 to Fighting Skill
- ~~Rank Two: +5 to Fighting Skill~~

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sat Sep 03, 2011 11:06 pm

First Steps - 6/10 - excellent post and thread length, good quality, no complaints. Nice story, I enjoyed reading it

Field Trip - 8/10 - Very enjoyable thread. The fight was detailed in each posts.

Just gonna point out two minor things - Usually we point out thought in quotations and italics. And then there is no real need to point out Fodder hollow (less then rank 0), I'm sure we will figure that out when they eat blade easily.

Once again those are minor issues, not worth much. Overall both threads were enjoyable.

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Fri Sep 09, 2011 9:46 pm

Hinsshi's Will

Reaching into Oneself

... Sadly I had a bad week this week, these are pathetic work for me but its something for this weak. T.T Next week will be tons better hopefully long as I can remain Confucius for more then three hours a day. >.>

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sat Sep 10, 2011 1:10 am

Hinsshi's Will

4/10

Decent length but the whole *(thoughts)* totally ruined the flow of the story for me, as well as the very large paragraphs.

Reaching into Oneself

5/10

This was much better, excellent length and good pacing.

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sat Sep 10, 2011 1:16 am

Congratz! Rank 1 Achieved!

Please state which stat you would like increased upon your next rank up Smile

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sat Sep 10, 2011 1:18 am

Thank you!~ And im sorry the last 2 RP posts were so dang sloppy ... Ugh. I ahte when I do terrible work. =.=

Anyway! *points up* As stated in my Signature and in the first Post! =) +5 Fighting Skill~ ^^

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sun Sep 25, 2011 5:22 am

Awaiting the Tutor
Time for Real Training

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sun Sep 25, 2011 12:51 pm

Awaiting the Tutor: 6/10

Well, first of all the post lengths on both sides, were very impressive, so good work on that. The thread was mostly an enjoyable read. But as Sal has already said, the whole *(thought)* thing does kinda ruin the flow of it. Also I realise that Kaiyo's recent departure made you finish the thread early, but rather than just leave it, you could have edited somewhat so you actually left the thread; because now it just looks unfinished and doesn't really make for that good of a read.

Time for Real Training: 3/10

Once again the post lengths were good. But this thread was really short; you only posted in it 3 times, which does make it seem a bit rushed.

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Sun Oct 23, 2011 7:15 pm

- An Errand Outside
I stopped with the Thought bubbles! =) yay~

Subject: Re: Hinsshi's Rank Up Request: Mon Oct 24, 2011 1:40 am

An errand outside: [6/10]

Hyuei needed a knight in shining armor the gets a man in pink. heh. That aside a great 'meet and greet'. While I applaud your ability in describing your character,I don't think you'll need to do so for each thread unless your attire has changed. Also your share Shinjo's affliction for using capitals when not needed. That aside a decent thread of both content and length.

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