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Arawn

Arawn


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Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23

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PostSubject: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSat Aug 27, 2011 12:15 am

Character Name: Arawn Dan'Shir

Username: Arawn

Link to Character Bio: Full profile

Current Rank: 6

Current Exp: 51/85 EXP

Roleplays to be Evaluated:

Forced battle

Failures

Requested Stat Point Increases:


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Bishamon Saitou

Bishamon Saitou


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Age : 29
Location : Anywhere and everywhere
Job/Interests : stuff, and other stuff...
Quote : Ah swords...natures knives.
Registration Date : 2011-06-03

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSat Aug 27, 2011 12:29 pm

Can't marked Forced Battle because I'm in it, shame really, you know how much I love to work.

Failures: 6/10
Really good, can't criticise it, sooooo good work, keep it up!
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Sal Norongachi


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Location : Scotland
Job/Interests : Philosophical Drunkard/Booze
Quote : Repensum est Canicula
Registration Date : 2009-04-30

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSat Aug 27, 2011 2:32 pm

You ready? Brace yourselves.

A Forced Battle:

As always mate, you guide the story well, the setting was clear and sharp in my mind from your descriptions. Only one critique i can give and that is that you try and break up your paragraphs more.

So, with that said.

6/10
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSun Sep 04, 2011 10:16 pm

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Bishamon Saitou

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Sep 05, 2011 9:30 am

Truancy: 6/10

Really enjoyed the thread. Good work showing that kid what for Twisted Evil Shame you took it so easy on him.

School Daze: 5/10

Another enjoyable read. Loved the opener, gave me a few good lolzz.
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeWed Sep 14, 2011 1:42 pm

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Bishamon Saitou

Bishamon Saitou


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Sep 19, 2011 1:17 pm

Striking in the shadow: 7/10

I'm a sucker for a good solo, and this was a really good one Razz Great length, great attention to detail, and nice technique you've got your hands on.

Grave mistakes: 5/10

A good solid thread really, not much to criticise, so not much else to say really...




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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeWed Sep 28, 2011 12:25 am

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Bishamon Saitou

Bishamon Saitou


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeThu Sep 29, 2011 3:48 pm

Wrong place, wrong time: 5/10

Good thread. Funny, perverted and unique. And that's good enough for me, good work.

Swimming: 5/10

Nice solo, an interesting one at that. Just lying chilling in a lake can be an interesting read...who knew? Anywayz as usual great detail, spelling, grammar etc.

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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 03, 2011 5:05 pm

Beta tester 2.0

Fighting skill +2
Speed +2
Spiritual Power +3
Technique +3


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeTue Oct 04, 2011 9:59 pm

Beta Tester 2.0 [6/10]

You did great story wise but you need to make your paragraphs a little easier to read space them out or indent them so as to let your reader know you started a new paragraph. Also when using a NPC you might want to give a brief side note explaining them I talked about this in the cbox with you so I wont cover it again. Finally it would of been nice for a quick recap on how you knew Bish's character...maybe I am too picky but meh...I callz em like I seez em.
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 17, 2011 11:38 pm

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Bishamon Saitou

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeThu Oct 20, 2011 10:05 am

Valentine pharmaceuticals: 6/10

A quite enjoyable read for the most part. A bit slow to start, but 'accidentally' knocking people out was amusing, so good work.

Recycling: 5/10

Nice solo. Good length, as always good detail etc. However! I believe it is "Inuit" you politically incorrect fool!

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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 1:31 am

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Kaoseu Enjel

Kaoseu Enjel


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Location : In the midst of disaster, dancing upon the scalding remains of this forever burning creation that has been deemed Hell. Care to join me? >:D
Job/Interests : Working on it/ Writing, Drawing, BMX
Quote : Fear is the strength which allows me to live...
Registration Date : 2010-05-15

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 7:56 pm

Distortion: 8/10 Fantastic battle, I enjoyed the back-story, and the flow of things. Would've made a solid ten, but be sure to review your posts before you click that button, several sentences are missing minor words, or some of the grammar is a bit off, but otherwise, well done.

Dragon's Bane: 9/10 Good length for this section, leaves one hanging on. Again, a few grammatical errors, but far less than previous, and excellent storytelling, with the details and the setting.
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Jan 23, 2012 8:47 pm

One was done in Word, the other was not. Try to guess which one. Smile

Resting gets you killed


Night stars and red snow

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DarkMaster


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Location : In a daze.
Job/Interests : That's Officer DarkMaster to you, buddy.
Quote : I'm afraid of the dark.
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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeFri Jan 27, 2012 2:51 pm

Resting gets you killed - 5/10 - I'll grade it since I didn't join until after you left to do battle on your own. BATTLE HOG! Four decent posts and a big dragon-esque hollow.

Night stars and red snow - 7/10 - You took it to easy on the cocky student. But a nice read as always.
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Arawn


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Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeWed Feb 01, 2012 9:55 pm

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Kaoseu Enjel

Kaoseu Enjel


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Job/Interests : Working on it/ Writing, Drawing, BMX
Quote : Fear is the strength which allows me to live...
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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeSun Feb 05, 2012 3:37 am

Remnants of Vengeance: 7/10

Wonderful storytelling, as always, and I loved the way you involved units aside from yourself, and told two sides at once, way to balance. Keep lookin' for those missing/extra words, though, VIGILANCE!
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Feb 20, 2012 8:33 pm

Practice makes permanent II - *cough*approve the kido*cough*

Taking inventory
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Arawn


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Feb 27, 2012 8:48 pm

New week new thread:

A simple request
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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeTue Feb 28, 2012 1:32 pm

Practice makes permanent: 6xp

Decent length, good sized posts and the kido practice melded well with the thread and as usual, good use of random NPCs.

Taking Inventory: 5/10

Nice introspective solo, not the longest but it was as long as it needed to be for the point to come across. Nice work.

A simple request: 3/10

I probably would have graded it higher had it lasted longer but as it is it's a really short thread despite the good posts on your part.


Edit: Oh and welcome to level 5
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Arawn


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Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
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Registration Date : 2010-06-23

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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Apr 30, 2012 8:59 pm

I humbly request the following stats changes:

+2 Fighting Skill
+3 Speed
+4 Spirit
+1 Technique
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DarkMaster


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PostSubject: Re: Arawn's Rank Up thread   Arawn's Rank Up thread I_icon_minitimeMon Apr 30, 2012 9:03 pm

taken care of
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Arawn


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