Kenji_Yasutake
Number of Posts : 43
Age : 36
Quote : "Cry Havoc, and let slip the dogs of war"
Registration Date : 2012-12-24
 |  Subject: Kenji Yasutake - Rank up  Thu Jan 03, 2013 7:58 pm | |
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Kenji Yasutake - Rank up Fri Jan 04, 2013 12:56 am | |
| You get 5 points total when you rank up.
Just like the old days: [4/10]
I remember this being an open thread. I might be mistaken, but it does feel like an intro to something else. If it was indeed an opening thread, I think you could have added more to make it into a more developed solo.Still I liked the imagery of the thread and the reflection of character. | |
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Kenji_Yasutake
Number of Posts : 43
Age : 36
Quote : "Cry Havoc, and let slip the dogs of war"
Registration Date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Re: Kenji Yasutake - Rank up Mon Jan 28, 2013 4:29 pm | |
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Kenji Yasutake - Rank up Mon Jan 28, 2013 6:30 pm | |
| Whispers of the future: [4/10]
The whispers plays little part in the actual thread, but figured it was meant to. You mixed it up on details. At times describing quite well yourself and action, but everything else being vague and fuzzy. The jumps in setting played a part, but not completely. Some blanks are left unfilled, but others cannot.
At a glance: [5/10]
Unlink Mr Shikuro you had a slight inclination to where the thread was going. Not much but the attempts to direct and move things along was there. Again it's a first time meeting so not much other than a brief exchange. | |
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