Jimbobfloba
Number of Posts : 112
Age : 29
Location : Seireiteii
Job/Interests : Psychology
Quote : If you got time to lean, you got time to clean
Registration Date : 2011-04-14
 |  Subject: Jimbobfloba (Tariasha Getsu) Rank up  Thu Jun 07, 2012 12:53 pm | |
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Jimbobfloba (Tariasha Getsu) Rank up Fri Jun 08, 2012 12:58 am | |
| Rising in the ranks: [4/10]
Not that much character involvement for your character, but that's not a bad thing. Felt like a "day in the life of an average shinigami" or perhaps just Tariasha's inner thoughts and dreams of being a captain. Meh. Either way a decent length solo. You had some good details at one point, and then weak on another, strong then weak. I know you had to be vague about the captain, but you could have went all out with the Lt. Minor typos, but nothing too bad.
Who needs friends: [6/10]
I have to say it's an interesting thread. It's almost like a kido learning thread, but in the end you did one right afterwards. The fruit of thy labors and all that. I reviewed Dray's part. But for what it's worth you did come across as someone trying to genuinely learn the spell. | |
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