Amaya
Number of Posts : 154
Age : 32
Job/Interests : Toturing innocent souls
Quote : Butterflies!
Registration Date : 2010-07-13
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 42
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Amaya rank up Fri Mar 02, 2012 2:05 pm | |
| New to town: [3/10]
Short, sweet, and missing some meat. It's a nice beginning for a character moving into the troubled city. Seems she's aiming for Rourke industries, good luck with that. First half was well and good the second slightly less. Lack of details made it seem like a rushed end to the thread. | |
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Amaya
Number of Posts : 154
Age : 32
Job/Interests : Toturing innocent souls
Quote : Butterflies!
Registration Date : 2010-07-13
| | Subject: Re: Amaya rank up Mon Mar 05, 2012 6:05 pm | |
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Junko
Number of Posts : 521
Age : 28
Registration Date : 2010-10-30
| | Subject: Re: Amaya rank up Tue Mar 06, 2012 5:21 pm | |
| Me gusta... Decent Plot, Omnious bad guy
7/10 Hidden | |
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Amaya
Number of Posts : 154
Age : 32
Job/Interests : Toturing innocent souls
Quote : Butterflies!
Registration Date : 2010-07-13
| | Subject: Re: Amaya rank up Wed Feb 20, 2013 5:10 pm | |
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Shin Kinsen
Number of Posts : 207
Age : 34
Registration Date : 2012-07-29
| | Subject: Re: Amaya rank up Wed Feb 27, 2013 4:11 pm | |
| I can only grade it for its current state, which is incomplete, or at least thats how it looks to me.
once again a CB thread is interesting, unique situation predictable responses. You tried for a few posts to get an advantage over Arawn's narration, but then kind of gave up. kinda curious as to how DM would end up involved if it had continued. Seemed like it died right when it was getting interesting.
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