Niradhara's Rank Up thread

Subject: Niradhara's Rank Up thread Tue Jul 31, 2012 2:06 am

Character Name: Remington Gravelle

Username: Aohada Nigami

Link to Character Bio: Niradhara Mehra

Current Rank: Rank 0

Current Exp: 15/20

Roleplays to be Evaluated:
My Life Ruined

Roleplays already Evaluated:
Picnicking in Sengoku
White Knight Wanted

Requested Stat Point Increases:

Number of Posts : 521 Age : 28 Registration Date : 2010-10-30

I liked the thread. 6/10

Subject: Re: Niradhara's Rank Up thread Sat Aug 04, 2012 7:41 pm

White Knight Wanted

Subject: Re: Niradhara's Rank Up thread Sat Aug 04, 2012 10:17 pm

White knight wanted: [3/10]

As creative as the double masked hollows sound, you seem to have problems directing them. After referring to your link of the hollow page I was further confused by the transformation and cero firing sequence.

Quote :: He coiled, his outer head split in two and flailing. When he recovered, he raised himself, splitting his tail into two legs, his long outer head split into two parts, making up claws on his long arms.

This must be the man form you mentioned. It seems head becomes arms. Thought you meant the mask or was it other head?

Quote :: Maggot's mouth opened wider after saying so, until his head had split into a giant maw and yellow light was gathering in his mouth. But if that wasn't enough, lights had already gathered in its claws, and it had put its hands together to reform the outer mask in front of itself. The Cero from the large mask fired like a beam, issuing forth in a single destructive yellow light from the mouth towards the shinigami, and also issuing upwards through its hollow hole into the sky behind it.

I'm guessing this was supposed to be like a double (triple?) cero? There's the mask charging a beam and the hands get one too. But then the hands reform the mask? That's what had me scratching my head. Seems the mask keeps splitting. How does this outer mask work? Is it just over the plain mask? So is there a gap between the mask because he swallows Tatsu and then there's the second mask. I read it multiple times trying to visualize what you were looking for here. Kinda surprising that 5 from the organization can't handle Vikaz, yet the gun makes short work of the hand monster.

Subject: Re: Niradhara's Rank Up thread Mon Aug 20, 2012 9:50 pm

My Life Ruined

Number of Posts : 521 Age : 28 Registration Date : 2010-10-30

My Life Ruined: 6/10

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