Kazuhiko
Number of Posts : 262
Age : 39
Location : Florida!!
Quote : War....war never changes....
Registration Date : 2010-08-01
 |  Subject: Kazuhiko's Rank Up thread  Mon Nov 28, 2011 12:43 pm | |
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Last edited by Kazuhiko on Mon Nov 28, 2011 5:40 pm; edited 1 time in total | |
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Kazuhiko's Rank Up thread Mon Nov 28, 2011 3:04 pm | |
| I would have replied earlier, but I was shopping online. Alot of great deals, sorry. I wish to comment that you're only allowed to submit 2 threads, 1 of which can be a solo. Please remove the solo you don't want to use at this time. When you do Bump the thread to get my attention and I'll put up a review/evaluation. | |
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Kazuhiko
Number of Posts : 262
Age : 39
Location : Florida!!
Quote : War....war never changes....
Registration Date : 2010-08-01
| | Subject: Re: Kazuhiko's Rank Up thread Mon Nov 28, 2011 5:41 pm | |
| Ok fixed now, my bad i was tired when i posted and thought there was only two up lol. my bad. | |
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Arawn
Number of Posts : 3440
Age : 43
Location : Here, but there
Job/Interests : Anything, but not everything
Quote : You were close, but I was right
Registration Date : 2010-06-23
| | Subject: Re: Kazuhiko's Rank Up thread Wed Nov 30, 2011 4:49 pm | |
| Return to Karakura haunting memories: [4/10]
I must say the dark blue is horrible with the black background. I'm glad he didn't say much. The parts were short and sweet for the most part til the 4th post. While nice and meaty there is a problem;
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- He realized that he was channeling some of his power into the shattered sword that he had in his hand. It was His grandfathers sword that Kaz had used before, but with drastically different results. When his grandfather had used the sword his powers seemed to meld with the blade, and flow from it like a river. When kaz even touched the blade before, his powers went haywire, never reacting the same way twice. But now was different, with the blade shattered he could hold the sword, even channel some of his own powers into the weapon before things started to go awry. But, if he touched the small piece of what was left of the blade then the same things would happen as before. He had been thinking about this alot lately. Why is it only when i touch the blade itself... He thought. .
Is repeated 3 times within the thread. At first I thought I had lost my place and read it wrong. Removing that and the remainder of the thread is fine. Try to watch out for that. Confusion aside I didn't have any problem with the rest.
Death and revenge: [2/10]
It's a shame this thread was so short, but Kaiyo's and your own departure had a part to play in it. Even now Ms Kaiyo is MIA and pops in from time to time. Normally we do require at least 3 posts (from the applicant) to accept a thread. In this case I'm reluctantly making an exception. Still with so little to work with, it's hard to put a high value on the thread.
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