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Character Name: (Your Character's Name That You Want To Rank Up.)

Username: Mania

Link to Character Bio: Zanshin

Current Rank: 0

Current Exp: 13/20

Roleplays to be Evaluated: Runner

Requested Stat Point Increases:

3/10 - A few missing words had me going back to figure out what you wanted to say. A couple of sentences confused me with the wording, and a bit of redundancy at the end of the story. But it was a decent story. Try not to get killed later.

Bloody encounter

Tough Survival

Bloody encounter: [3/10]

For the most part it's a nice little solo story. Mania kicks some arse. But there are some things that bring it down abit. You had five guys, and only 4 were killed. Or I miscounted. Rather short and the fight was almost too one sided. I'd think grown adults put up a bigger struggle even after the brutal murder of their leader.

Tough survival: [3/10]

I want to make something clear; I'm not a grammar nazi, nor am I a punctuation perfectionist. But you and Bish both are abit crazy about commas. Your first post was 1 sentence. Later you've got a post made up of only 3 sentences, but it's looks like 2 and a half paragraphs. Not a big problem, but noticing it too often. Otherwise the thread works out well enough. Also a note you refer to yourself a Mania in some posts.

Old thread. Oh yea!

Complications on top of Complications - 4/10

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