Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread

Subject: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Tue Sep 20, 2011 5:27 pm

Character Name: Shioshi Reinuu

Username: shinjo97

Link to Character Bio: Shioshi Reinuu

Current Rank: 2

Current Exp: [1/45]

Roleplays to be Evaluated

A Rogue Encounter!

Requested Stat Point Increases:

Fighting Skill +5

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Wed Sep 21, 2011 1:51 am

Future Comrades: Shioshi vs Bishamon: [4/10]

A decent length fighting thread. A good clip of postings as well. I will say that quite afew of the actions were hard to follow, I found myself reading and re-reading them and then trying to mirror them. Weird stuff for the most part. Still very creative I guess.

Scars that have grown worse: [4/10]

A meeting of enemies that quickly become friends. Felt like you forgave him a little to easily. Calm or not, someone beats the crap out of me, hardly going to be chums about it. You did a good job of posting with Draylon's short replies. Otherwise nothing too bad.

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Mon Sep 26, 2011 9:18 pm

Just one for now, though I'll have my second ready for the app later this week... I think.

A Rogue Encounter!

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Mon Sep 26, 2011 10:19 pm

New thread are to be added the. Leaving the top post to be edited by mods

A rogue encounter: [4/10]

I will applaud your involvement in a 4 person thread that ended successfully. Pretty common for something like that to die off. And I'll congratulate you on getting knocked out during said thread. Fun times. As it stands the posts are pretty sold overall. A small note you do tend to capital letters when not needed. Although zanpukto is a proper name, no need to capitalize it mid sentence. Not a major point, but still something to watch out for.

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Sat Oct 01, 2011 11:16 am

Second thread for this week. A solo.

Hollow's in Rukongai!

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:11 pm

Hollow's in Rukonai!: 6/10

Nice solo, length and detail was all there. I noticed a few spelling mistakes, but more towards the end. I take it you might have been rushing to get it finished? Well regardless good solo, I'm interested to see what that NPC of your is planning...

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Wed Oct 12, 2011 6:04 pm

Just one for now, again.

The Return

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Wed Oct 12, 2011 10:19 pm

The Return: [2/10]

I don't want anyone to think that "talking" threads get low scores, but this one was rather bland. Your character was gone for awhile and yet the reason was rather mediocre. I would think a more detailed story or even a flashback sequence, but nothing much from it. Rather than saying you got into the storytelling, you could have gotten into the storytelling. When the conversation came to zanpukto and shikai more effort was made. Other than that a simple exchange of two friends meeting again.

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Mon Sep 10, 2012 12:24 am

Actually have something for the first time in forever!

Two Hearts, Part One - Solo

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Mon Sep 10, 2012 12:59 am

Two Hearts: [5/10]

Gag me with a spoon. Being all flirty with the girl, both of you blushing. That aside a good length on the solo. Really lacking details on the enemies. The most we get is wolf like hollow and dragon like. Much is left up to the reader. One of the more obvious things that come to mind; if he's injured why doesn't he go back to SS? The other question; if he's injured why was he rushing to attack? Oh wells, more to see in part 2.

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Sun Feb 17, 2013 7:32 pm

Here's to hoping I finally hit Rank 2 O.O

Make it Explode

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Tue Feb 19, 2013 12:55 am

Make it explode: [4/10]

A rather reluctant 4. I was looking at a 3.5. Dealing with Flux's split personalities was tricky at times. He did play the part other the arrogant man as well as the passive boy. Regardless the exchange was okay at best. I know we encouraged people to finish up open threads, but seemed moreso a showdown of kido. Can't say it was the most riveting of battles.

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Tue Feb 19, 2013 10:08 pm

Two Hearts, Part Two - Solo

Subject: Re: Shioshi Reinuu's Rank Up Thread Fri Feb 22, 2013 11:01 pm

Two Hearts part 2: [2/10]

I had finished my usual reading of the thread and started the evaluation process. Was almost done when I figured I'd read the first thread for reference. Okay, now I know the full story. All is well and good for me to start posting a reply when I noticed I had reviewed the first thread.

Quote :: ...a good length on the solo. Really lacking details on the enemies. The most we get is wolf like hollow and dragon like. Much is left up to the reader. One of the more obvious things that come to mind; if he's injured why doesn't he go back to SS? The other question; if he's injured why was he rushing to attack? Oh wells, more to see in part 2.

My first reaction affraid

I already had such a post in mind.

The next reaction: $Writer\'s Block$

Nothing had changed. Nice length, but part 2 is just part 1. Here's to part 3 with your shikai...

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