Saroki was never really a good student in classes about history and math, but still she knew it was important, so she tried her best to learn, even though she thought the only thing a Shinigami needed was to be strong, she sighed as she was day dreaming again, she opened her history book and started reading it, she was reading about so many interesting things, maybe she had been wrong about class, she kept on reading gaining various knowledge, she was never really smart, but she noticed things in seconds that would take other people minutes or even hours, she studied the notes on the chalkboard infront of her, suddenly a fellow class mate next to her snapped her out of her learning streak, he snapped his fingers infront of Sarokis eyes "Yo Saroki, you alright?" He said showing a bit of concern in his voice, Saroki blinked and looked at him standing up and flailing her arms around "What the hell is your probolem!? Don't you see i'm trieing to fricken study!?!?" Suddenly all of the eyes in the room focused on her, the boy next to Saroki just stared at her as if she wher a maniac, Saroki looked around, lucky for her the teacher wasan't in the room, she sat down slowly as the students eyes wher still fixed on her, she gulped and went back to studying trieing to blow the situation over, it didn't work, the students whispered to each other taunting her, the boy next to him whispered into her ear "Your not usually this focused in history class..." He whispered showing a bit of sarcasim in his voice, Saroki sighed a bit going back to work.

After class was done she was moveing onto tactics and strategy class, takeing her seat she took out a notebook and a book, she listened to the teacher while observeing the formations he drew out on the chalk board, it interested her greatly, it seemed these formations might help her in combat and what not, she started to think differently that strength was the only true power, it seemed like knowledge was another weapon in a Shinigamis arsenal, after class was over she was allowed to spar with a few other Shinigami, it was a activity the staff created for the Shinigami students to show what they learned, it was a five versus five Shinigami sparring mach, though their would be one leader each that would command the other four Shinigami, the ten Shinigami gathered in a large grass field, with a stroke of luck Saroki was a leader of the red team, she had read about stances in history class and knew how to fight well, and with her new found knowledge in her tactics class she should have been able to order her team to set up various formations to match the other teams formations.

The blue team gathered a few hundred inches away from Saroki and her team mates, she ordered her team to spread out, she stood infront of them drawing her Zanpakuto, it seemed the opposeing team has not studied much in their classes, maybe a easy victory, though underestimateing opponents was the worst mistake a Shinigami could make.

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Saroki studied the other teams formation, it seemed their wher four all grouped togethor tightly, the fith wasn't their. Is it a trap? She thought to herself, suddenly the fifth member of the other team flash stepped out from some shrubs and sliced into a team mate on the far edge of Sarokis team. Saroki was shocked on the speed in which the shinigami traveled at, Saroki yelled out "Group togethor!" She guessed spreading out wasn't the best idea, the other team started surounding Sarokis team, a sarcastic sneer was wiped across her face, all of the members of the blue team rushed in thinking they had won, Saroki rushed towards the shinigami attempted to slice into her, she then jumped over him and sliced him width size, he fell to the ground injured. She then flash stepped to another one of the blue team members and attempted to slice into them, but this member seemed to have better reflexes than the last one and quickly spun around and blocked her swipe. Saroki growled as they both wher locked into each other, Sarokis team mates seemed to been have been in a bit of trouble as they wher struggleing with the enemy members attacks, Saroki growled a bit. She then swept her leg under the man that she was locked with, he fell to the ground, Saroki quickly slashed her blade into the man to mark that he was beaten, she then signaled her team to fall back to her. it was four against one, red teams favor, she grinned a bit, though it seemed the blue team members wher lineing up in a vertical formation, which was odd because that was like handing her the win, though once again she couldn't underestimate her opponents.

Though Saroki let her guard down, she stabbed her Zanpakuto into the ground and leaned on the handle "What the heck?..." she muttered to herself waiting for them, suddenly as the red team came into reach they flash stepped behind Saroki and her team. One of the blue team members instantly sliced into a red tea, member, then the blue team engaged Sarokis team. Saroki quickly grabbed her Zanpakuto but before she could look back she was sliced into by a blue team member, she was shocked at the fact that she had been beaten, she sat down and watched her team quickly finished off, the match was over, blue team victorious. Both teams wher quickly taken to the medical district where they wher treated for any wounds they had, Saroki was dismissed shortly afterwards, Saroki walked home like any other day, sickened at herself that she was beaten, she finally was at home, she walked to a table and layed down about twenty books from her various classes, she started reading through each book. A few hours later she stopped studying and went to bed.

The next morning she waked up, she shrugged as she never was a morning person, Saroki got out of bed and changed into a fresh uniform, she then walked to the academy, for another brutal day of training...

((Ooc: Sorry if it's hard to understand or if it's too short, I have to cut it short for a few 'VARIOUS' reasons And sorry for the last post, hopefully this one is better xD ))