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Koleri

Koleri


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Number of Posts : 71
Age : 31
Registration Date : 2012-09-17

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PostSubject: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeSat Oct 06, 2012 7:42 pm

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Character Name: Koleri

Username: Koleri

Link to Character Bio: https://thebleachworld.darkbb.com/t4170-koleri

Current Rank: 1

Current Exp: 11/30 (This is only for staff)

Roleplays to be Evaluated https://thebleachworld.darkbb.com/t4182-doublecrossed


Requested Stat Point Increases: 5 speed

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Shin Kinsen

Shin Kinsen


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Number of Posts : 207
Age : 34
Registration Date : 2012-07-29

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 08, 2012 12:32 am

4/10
Not much happens, ya coulda done more and described the assasination and the trip to the client and gotten a much higher score, other than that it would be unlikely for the client to end the assasin himself, thats grunt work, remember throwing knives point first is hard, maybe a comment or two about that, just take a look over it once your done and try to add as much as possible, generally the more action, the more description, the more length, and the more sense it makes, The higher the grade.
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Koleri

Koleri


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Number of Posts : 71
Age : 31
Registration Date : 2012-09-17

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 08, 2012 12:43 pm

I made it into two seperate threads I didn't want to make a really long post https://thebleachworld.darkbb.com/t4176-a-job is the where I killed the mob boss. Rules said I can't use two solos so I just picked one
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Shin Kinsen


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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeMon Oct 08, 2012 2:21 pm

3/10
pretty darn short, decent descriptions, very uneventful, just introducing your job via a basic killing.

If you're posting soloes that are linked it's best to submit them in chronological order (order in which they happen) and unless the solo is breaching on about say 3500 to 4000 words don't bother splitting it. You will generally get more exp if it's one long solo than 2 short ones ant it only takes up one solo slot, so basically only break it if u think each half is worthy of a decent grade.
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Koleri


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Number of Posts : 71
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Ezrachek Rayone


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Age : 30
Location : Spotsylvania, Virginia
Job/Interests : Partner at Machinima
Quote : Show her that you're not that shy! (Fancy Footwork - Chromeo)
Registration Date : 2012-01-13

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeWed Oct 31, 2012 12:16 am

Hard session - 5/10

Pretty good length and over all quality of the solo was good. Try breaking up the long paragraphs to make multiple, shorter paragraphs. No points were taken off for that reason, it's just mentally fatiguing to read such a long wall of text. Good solo.
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Koleri

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Job/Interests : That's Officer DarkMaster to you, buddy.
Quote : I'm afraid of the dark.
Registration Date : 2010-07-18

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeThu Jan 03, 2013 7:37 pm

Assassination? - 5/10

Meconnaissance - 4/10

Approved for Rank 1
*stamps Koleri's forehead*
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Koleri

Koleri


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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeTue Jan 08, 2013 2:56 pm

Awesome thanks alot
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Koleri

Koleri


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Hibiki Jishin

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeTue Feb 05, 2013 5:47 pm

Backlash- 5/10.

Simple, short, and effective.
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Job/Interests : Writing
Quote : “Everyone dies. It is how one lives that matters.” --- R.A. Salvatore
Registration Date : 2011-06-16

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PostSubject: Re: Koleri's rank up   Koleri's rank up I_icon_minitimeMon Mar 04, 2013 10:41 pm

Lost in Another World : 5/10


First, main thing: It felt as though the thread ended rather abruptly. I don't know if there was a continuation or something elsewhere, or maybe Mania just never got around to posting again, but seeing as it doesn't really seem to fall on you for that, don't sweat it too much; aside from that, it was a pretty solid read, though it could've been fleshed out a bit more. Just noticed a few little errors here and there, but nothing major. Good job.
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