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PostSubject: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Aug 14, 2012 12:46 am

Link to Character Bio: Shin

Current Rank: 2

Current Exp: 10/45

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Aug 14, 2012 12:57 am

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Aug 14, 2012 12:59 am

No speed limit 7/10 Great post, entertained me from start to end, I'm looking forward to see it's follow up!
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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Aug 20, 2012 2:06 am

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Aug 20, 2012 4:50 pm

Meeting in the streets: [3/10]

A rather sluggish and stuttering start. But such is the nature of meet and greets threads. Some run on sentences I missed on the first read through. Complete thought can be interrupted, avoid more than two. Not much to say as you played a more support role.

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Aug 20, 2012 9:03 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Aug 21, 2012 5:11 pm

A wall-o-text 9/10 great post in general, got long at some points.

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sun Aug 26, 2012 11:35 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Aug 27, 2012 1:00 am

6/10 for it.
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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Sep 25, 2012 6:48 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Tue Sep 25, 2012 9:26 pm

Running For Fun - 4/10. Short posts lengths as expected with a more dialogue based thread. At the end it seemed like a battle was going to be introduced possibly, but it ended rather shortly. Still an overall good read.

An Odd Encounter - 5/10. Still short posts, and again, as expected with a dialogue based thread. The reactions between your character and Shakaku add some humor into it, as well as some inquiry as to the distrust of your character with the shinigami. Good read.
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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:56 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Oct 08, 2012 12:31 am

A new blade: [4/10]

A day in the life of little Shin. Abit of training with throwing of daggers and then some fighting philosophy to round off the day. An interesting one, to say the least. But I'm not sure a sound concept. The curving blade does require some finesse (points at his kurkri knife), can't say I've tried a curved handle weapon so no real clue how tricky that would be. Enjoy you new blade before you shikai :p

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Thu Oct 25, 2012 2:18 am

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Thu Oct 25, 2012 1:54 pm

A meeting of sorts- 3/10
Posts were awefully short, as expected for a dialogue thread. Could've had a bit more details in there.
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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sun Oct 28, 2012 9:30 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Oct 29, 2012 12:23 am

To learn kido: [5/10]

Essentially it's a kido learning thread. Big surprise as the title says as much. That aside it's everything you'd expect from a novice, untrained person trying to accomplish the spells. At the same time I questioned how you didn't do more harm in attempting such things with said training. I did enjoy the fact the book got trashed, but figured it was going to happen once you damaged it the first time. Tim isn't going to be happy with you.

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sun Nov 04, 2012 11:07 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Nov 05, 2012 10:52 pm

Meeting something: [4/10]

If I didn't know any better I'd think this was a training thread. The end was the point of the story, but could have been larger. In this case the wind-up didn't match the pitch, but it managed to wiggle across the plate. That being said I further graded this down due to your overzealous use of Mr Comma. I'm not a punctuation nazi, but it's hard to overlook five to six of them in a super long sentence. I think you didn't notice it as you've capitalized words after some commas. So you know the sentence is over, but you're pressing the wrong button. Slow down and double check. (pity point was added)

Congratz on the slide into 2nd rank. Work hard....

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sat Jan 19, 2013 5:09 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Jan 21, 2013 12:30 am

Make new friends: [6/10]

Seems this thread was made for you and yet took little part in the first portion. Yet it could be considered staying in character of a shy kid. Fight breaks out shikai obtained. Not much else to speak of.

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Sat Feb 16, 2013 9:04 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Shin Kinsen-Rank Up   Mon Feb 18, 2013 4:28 pm

The Revival pt 3: [4/10]

Once again you battle with Mr Comma. One day you shall vanquish your foe. Gotta watch the that. I find it odd that everyone calls Kuro, Kuro. I would guess friends might use his first name and the rest would say Captain Akarui. Just saying. It's also odd how everyone knew your name and exploits immediately. Horn tooting aside the battle was filled with red shirts. Everyone too shocked to really react to your weapon. No hesitation in releasing your shikai, but with your abysmal stats outside of speed it's a given. Still there was one part I did like:

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" But ya know, people are usually more similar to their swords than they expect'. Admittedly, there appeared to be a contradiction with Shin's shikai and himself but Kaiyo knew better than to assume such facts. 'And you shouldn't pick a family by where your sword fits, you should pick it by where you do."
Thank you, Kaiyo.

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