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PostSubject: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 5:40 am

Character Name: Gabriel Dorakyura

Username: Drac

Link to Character Bio: http://thebleachworld.darkbb.com/t3963-drac-shinigami-complete

Current Rank: 2

Current Exp: 30/30

Roleplays to be Evaluated:

http://thebleachworld.darkbb.com/t3973-the-beginning-of-a-warrior-path-open (Already Evaluated by Arawn (FtM))

Requested Stat Point Increases:
+5 Speed


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 5:06 pm

Did you wish for the thread to be considered a solo then? If so you should removed the (open) from it. In addition you only get 5 more stat points when you reach rank 1, not 15.

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 5:47 pm

Ok, I made the changes

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 5:59 pm

The beginning path of the warrior: [5/10]

A very decent sized solo, nearly 1k. (I was curious so I checked) Some errors in spelling. Afew easy misses, almost too easy to have been missed. Try to proofread. I'll have to note that shunpo is a rank 2 ability. But for the sake of the story it works. Only of letdown was the nondescript bad guy senior. Really didn't know what he looked like so I envisioned some generic thug. Sure he was fodder, but even fodder deserve some attention.


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 6:14 pm

Ok, thanks for the evaluation. I work on those mistakes and go more in deep, also quick question how much do i need to reach rank 1.

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jul 14, 2012 6:33 pm

*points at the 5/20 next to Current Exp*

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sun Jul 15, 2012 1:49 am


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Wed Jul 25, 2012 3:47 am

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Wed Jul 25, 2012 10:21 am

Test of speed: 4/10

Sorry for the late review, but since you posted it early forgot about it. A bit on the short side, so there's not much in the way of development. A quick run around the track, and then a trip back. HA! I made a funny. Razz. Your act of kindness almost warmed by black heart. But seriously; a lot of minor errors. Some might have been caught on reread. Not going to be perfect, so it happens. I do have a question; if the track is in a big open space, where are the sandbags swinging from?

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Fri Jul 27, 2012 12:20 am

Thanks. My bad on my part i suspose to write that out the ground on the side of the track rose metal poles that had sandbags attach to them at the end

How about the Capture the Flag thread?

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Fri Jul 27, 2012 4:16 pm

6/10 for you. Get bigger and play again.
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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Tue Aug 07, 2012 12:33 am


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Tue Aug 07, 2012 1:50 am

I have the bigger stick: [5/10]

You did well enough for someone with the odd stacked against them. But the fact you survived could be considered a win (technically it was 3v1). Repeating what others say isn't a bad thing to do once in a awhile. At least when showing your reaction or if someone has done alot of talking. Paraphrase it. Other times you can just make your response without a recap. Careful with those tags. Make sure you close and/or open them properly.


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Tue Aug 07, 2012 2:05 pm

Thanks arawn

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Tue Aug 07, 2012 3:41 pm


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Mon Sep 03, 2012 11:27 am

4/10 - The Beginning of a Trial

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Tue Sep 25, 2012 11:29 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Wed Sep 26, 2012 2:40 am

The induction to squad 2: [3/10]

Think I mentioned it before about repeating what others "say". It's not a bad practice, but it doesn't work well with this one. By staying true to the speaker's color I can see that you own post are rather small. Seeing as there's multiple talkers it's almost impossible for a completely fluid conversation. By the time you try to react to Kuro, DM has spoke, or Ezra has had his say. When you're given alot of dialogue you can just react to all of it. Rare to see a 4 person talking thread.

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Thu Dec 27, 2012 12:25 am


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Thu Jan 03, 2013 7:30 pm

Targeting the Captain IV - 9/10

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Fri Jan 04, 2013 11:42 am


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sat Jan 05, 2013 12:59 am

So much love: [7/10]

And interesting mix. Action some drama. Still doing the parrot bit.Hulk Smash indeed. Seems like everyone is advocating for the second division and yet they get in the most trouble. Oh wells.

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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Sun Feb 10, 2013 1:09 am


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PostSubject: Re: Drac Rank Up   Wed Feb 13, 2013 10:16 pm

Judgement: [5/10]

The system is broken. I mean really after what you guys did to those bandits "Self-defense" is the last thing I'd call it. Seriously you smashed his head in with your fists! It's like if I ran someone over with my car then sued them for the damages to my vehicle. Remind me not to mess with 2nd squad. Legal system aside a rather quick exchange. Not sure why you kept switching colors on your text. Later it was when you were repeating Kaiyo's speaking, but not the first time. No a big issue.

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